PREMISE # 2: expansion of a short

This is actually a treatment from last semester for a short I made in Maya with some Flash elements. I'd really like to expand on it because the original though was much more involved and involved chase sequences around the city of Florence, knocking over the statue of David, a bus launching off the top of the Duomo, and many other things. Rather than rewrite the whole thing right now, I'll just post the short treatment and figure out reblocking the new scenes later... ehh...

Here's a link to the short (if you haven't seen it on my facebook): http://vimeo.com/19243308

ANIMATION TREATMENT: "The Bus"

The camera pans down to reveal girl walking with a backpack (probably on S. Egidio). She is looking down as she walks toward us. The buildings are tall and somewhat off-kilter and papery looking. A faint noise is heard in the distance. As it grows louder, she looks up and into the camera. A beat later, a demonically red bus zooms past and the girl starts in a big way. After the bus has exited, she is left in a pretzel-like pose, on one foot, arms wrapped around her head and clearly shaken.

Title frame: “The Bus”

Next, cut to the girl, this time walking away from us. She approaches a corner. As she is about to turn, a bus zooms around it, sending her against the wall, eyes wide. She clings there for a moment before sliding down a bit.

Next cut: The girl walks toward us again, apprehensive and looking quickly from side to side every so often. She comes up on another corner and stops short of it by a few feet. She flattens herself against the wall and sidles up to the corner of the building, easing her way over to try and see around it. Just as she does, the bus again zooms past but this time from behind her. After it passes, she is revealed standing stiff as a board. After a beat, she begins to tip backwards and then falls over flat (think like a tree).

Next: close ups of a door slamming, lock being slid, window being closed and curtains drawn. Cut to the girl, wracked with tremors, sitting down at a table in a small apartment. There is a pizza box on the table. She puts her hands on the table and it, too, shakes.

Zoom in to frame just the girl and half of the table with the pizza box. She takes a deep breath and stops shaking. She smiles and reaches to open the pizza box. Just as soon as she swings the lid up, a bus scales up out of the box (this all happens very fast) and smacks her in the face, pushing both bus and girl out of frame.